Improve my POV?

[DEMIGODDESS]

I have a point of view about something currently...
An intentional act of being a pest to this forum.

Here's my main reference for what I'm about to reply to Susan with, and I'd like other opinions, because maybe I'm just taking her the wrong way. This is not meant to cause trouble, but to make a point.
Here's the main quote I'm referring to.

strangles sparky thank you but youl never stop me hahaha and you cant see me unless your a mage,I revile myself or if your my friend all of which theres no chance

Rofl, Susan, I hope your kidding.

The ghost thing seems alright, however.

I'm pretty sure the staff has had it with you and Eragon causing trouble. I think it looks like because they caught your character and threw her in jail, your trying to be annoying for some kind of revenge (and not in a good sport kind of way). I really think if you don't stop trying to be a pest you'll just be IP banned, eventually.
If not, do correct me.

But look, and I'd like some other people's input on this, maybe if you made your posts make sense, play by the rules, use some kind ov punctuation, the staff would be less harsh on you.

[Sparky.]

Spell check ftw!


Er.. But the thing is, not even spell check would help with that..? >.< The Almighteh Spell Check of Uberd00m isn't -that- good..

But meh.

Revenge indeed. o.o Lots of it.


..er... in other words, I think Demehgoddesssama is right.

[DEMIGODDESS]

I mean I don't care if a comma is in the wrong place, theres not an apostrophe sometimes, I'm not a nazi about it. But for christ sakes USE PERIODS and commas SOMETIMES. Make SENTENCES.

No, spell check can't form sentences.
There needs to be Grammar check and Maturity check.

*big smile*

Honestly, my dyslexic boyfriend has better punctuation and sentence structure and its incredibly difficult for him to read even his own sentances.

[Parin d'Aulaire]

hmmmmmm,

It seems we have more Zeion's about . . .

[Muryllis]

Zeions*


[edit] And yes, I agree completely. First magic and dragons, and now... ghosts? Um.

That, and about grammar/spelling - please please please pay attention to Mrs. Jones or whomever when you come back to school tomorrow; elementary school's not ALL about recess and biggest booger contests, you know.

[Alezand Jozlyn, Allaine knight]

Hey I had fun at those!!! But seriously, write like you are writing a story, cuz you are. This is the story of your character and how they interact with others and affect the history of this said kindom. I can hardy type to save my life and yet I still manage to put decent posts with FULL punctuations and structure. I know it can be hard to form paragraphs in this format, not really able to indent. but there should be a conveyance of what you are trying to tell the others about what your character is doing. Think about more than action, think about setting, reaction, expression, PROPER dialogue, and descriptive words. Write the way you read, I guess is the best advise I can give you. I am a BIG starwars nut, and a general fantasy/sci fi fan. I read all the time. And I then put that exact same writing style into my post, as best I can. I also write fan fiction, but thats beside the point. Write like you read you fav story...

[Muryllis]

Speaking of indentation, I don't see why it's a problem to simply hit enter twice; without an indent, if you only hit enter once, your text looks like one massive, uninviting blob. I don't like reading massive, uninviting blobs. Hit enter twice; save a kitten.

[lilyparis]

look Cain thinks my death was tragic right quite brave ruining my head by poisinin it now I dont want Susan to just be finnished like that.I wish to go on for a bit longer run Susan dry but in an agreement I will try to punctuait my posts better.So all I want is some fun.

[DEMIGODDESS]

Um..........


Ok...well, what you wrote still needs work. It should have looked more like this (I'm trying to help you):

"Look, Cain thinks my death was tragic, right? Quite brave ruining my head by poisoning it.
Now I don't want Susan to just be finished like that.
I wish to go on for a bit longer, run Susan dry, but in an agreement.
I will try to punctuate my posts better.So all I want is some fun."

Don't forget spell check to help you out either.

I suppose whatever you want to do with Susan is up to you and Cain, then.
I'm very sure everyone will appreciate your effort in trying to improve your posts.

[lilyparis]

Look sorry my computer was giving off steam or smoke for some reason,dads coffee, well luckily I had my laptop, so I apologies for not spell checking or finishing the post. But well what the rest of it reads, is when I finnish saying my goodbyes and speak with my sister and have some fun with the Queen I will terminate Susan for good and take up another character in saying this I ask the Queen not to kill me to early.

[DEMIGODDESS]

Ok, I understand.

I see your new thread, I'll join it, also.

I apologize for thinking you were "out to get us" sort of thing. If you were because you feel everyone was against you, it's ok, I see people ganging up. Don't worry about it, there are people who do want to play fair. =)

No one has the right to kill your characters so don't worry about that either.

If you ever need any help wording things, grammar, and such, just ask. It doesn't need to be perfect, just legible, hehe.

[lilyparis]

Thanks which one, the one with Lucy or waiting just waiting well see you there.

[DEMIGODDESS]

The one with Susan's ghost at the lake, hun. =)

I'll post when I get the chance.

[lilyparis]

Sure,see ya soon.